Interesting work, Grogerson, it's familiar territory to most of us, but you've managed to take that familiarity and put in some mystery. Who is this god of light that holds back the dark? Is it a god of light at all?
Well told from the pespective of the characters too. For a mostly narrative tale, they shine through, especially Imoen. I also like the main character's name, Covenant could be both prophecy and a reminder to Gorion.
Just to be nit picky, here are some typos I spotted in the text:
For a moment she thought he was tring to scare her. Then she saw a twinkle in his eye. If he was a paladin, he certainly was like none she had ever heard of.
Should be "trying"
Covenant had carried her for nearly an hour before setting her down to walk on her own. Nothing was said from the time they left the body of her attacker, and the silence continued until the sun had reached it's zenith. They stopped for a few minutes to eat some bread and cheese and drink some water.
Should be "its" (I do this one enough myself)
They had to leave before sunrise when Imoen's curiosity created an uproar, and they barely beating the guards through the gate.
Should be "beat"
The next morning she watched as Covenant went around town for supplies, even to a Temple of Lathander for some healing potions, which he put in her charge. He also picked up another party member, a weakling male named Garrick. All they had to do was kill a trolop calling herself Silke. What skills he could possibly provide was beyond her.
Should be "trollop"
When they returned to Beregost he managed to net some interesting items as well as gold. The mad cleric Bassilus was most profitable when they returned his holy symbol to the Temple of Lathander. Covenant used the money to buy more supplies, including a suit of enchanded chain mail and sling for her. She was given Bassilus' enchanted hammer and some pathetic paladin's magic shield as well.
Should be "enchanted"
In the doorway stood the two men. A shocked sadness was on Garrick's face. Covenant's face was emotionless, but his eyes held a deap shadow. "You're showing your wisdom, Lady Viconia, though I expected you two to get my journal before this." He had no anger or bitterness in his voice.
Should be "deep"
Aklon: Traveller. Healer. Warrior. Lover. Coming Soon at G3 (I swear!)
to visit Aklon's G3 page. Cam is on some kind of crack or something... either that, or it's the influence of Dr. Feelgood.
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